Man I hate review summery lines...
The song was overall pretty decent. Drums are nice, but I find myself wanting more from the fills. Levels, timbre, and structure are all decent it seems. I appreciate the last chord of the song.
The section that starts around :35 is really what kills it for me. Keep learning and lets hear more!
Yeah, i wasnt really too happy with this at all. But i couldnt get what i wanted outa it and it was pissing me off to much so i just kinda gave up on it. My next attempt, i'm foucsing on everything flowing more and transitions between parts smoother. Anyway thanks for the review!
Its nice
The piece seems well done.
It seems to lack an overall structure.
Its nice to listen to, but seems to get old after a bit.
Because I cannot find anything wrong with it, I will note vote other then my review. I rate the piece in its entirety: 6/10.
thanks :D, i'm confused :S but thank :D
Very nice
Emotions are conveyed right off the bat.
Piano was the perfect choice for the voicing of that melody.
The strings seem to effectively support the piano.
The drums seem a bit out of place, yet, complete the function of moving the song forward.
Structure was not obvious, but seems to be there.
The piece seems slightly repetitive.
The melody in specific:
- Is nicely composed. I appreciate the balance in voicing on the piano.
- On a scale from 1 to 10, the emotion of the overall melody I would rate a 6.
A suggestion to fix this: feature on very high pitched note that leads down to the resolution of the melody. If you are familiar with the term "skip-wise," this is what I am referring to. You did a bit of this already around 0:40.
I'll keep those tips in mind.
Generally Good
- The beat is nice.
- The layering is nice.
- The name and genre "Trance" fit this song very well.
- Levels are great.
- I enjoy how you stop some of the action to feature certain loops.
- The piece is very creative.
While it may be what you were going for, I find my ears begging for some upper-voiced melodic line (something I can take away from this and remember). I believe that this is very important, thus removing 3 points from my overall score.
Thanks for the Contructive Criticism :D
Yeah, I know what you mean.
Ill add some "Ummph" to The melody next Upload.
Needs Work
Moving line is very nice.
When the melody comes in, its a bit square. I'd like to hear some variation.
You seem to have a build up to nothing. There is nothing I'm looking forward to. I'm not sure what you meant by "off-beat," but, I like the creativity included in the percussion (bass drum) in reference to its time placements.
Some ways to fix this:
Rewrite your melody to change pitchs more often then every 2 "counts."
Use a chord progression to essentially "lead" the listener somewhere.
Perfect. This demo was intended to be listened by people like you. Thank you.
-KK-
Great Stuff
You had me sold within 15 seconds, thats very good.
The rhythmic change around 35 is very creative and fits quite well, you use it again throughout the piece very well.
The structure is very nice--- short and sweet, not to repetitive.
I'm not a fan of the... what sounds to me like a resampled "break-beat". And there is a lack of what I would call "main theme," making more ambient then catchy (but this could have been totally what you were going for).
Yup, I got that rhythm idea from some of ParagonX9's songs, like Chaoz Japan and Chaoz Survivor. Also, I couldn't really think of a melody that fit, so I just stuck with the ambient feeling. Thanks!
Levels
To much distortion for my taste (which took no part in my scoring).
The song follows a basic structure, which is good.
The transition into piano seemed odd.
Cutting the volume completely off the guitar sounds bad (to me).
The ending was very sudden.
The levels were off between the guitar and piano. While trying to listen to the nice piano melody, I'm being beaten down by a very punchy guitar.
I've had a lot of troubles with endings and solos. I just can't seem to slow down or speed up
Great Job.
It is generally a good piece of work. Here are a few things I like/dislike about it:
- It takes a very long to get going.
- You have quite a few melodies going at once, and they still fit--- impressive.
- The structure of the song seems to be beginning to end, with no variation chord progression.
- I really want to hear more of a solid melodic line that I can count on coming back throughout the song. As of now the whole song seems to be like a "solo section," in which individuals make up stuff.
You're musically creativity is yours; however, these are my suggestions:
- Follow a form (i.e. A B A C A, A B A, etc)
- Construct 2 to 3 major themes which you introduce, keep from the listener, and then let it all go at the end.
- Let the song build faster at the beginning, yet, add some of that emptiness in the middle to give the listener some relief from the busyness of the song.
Ok ok ok.
First off, thanks for leaving a detailed review! This is all really good advice and I appreciate your help.
Now, on to a few things you told me..
I see where you're coming from when you say "The song seems beginning to end.." I listen to it and I do see that there really is no chord progression with the song. Hopefully I'll be able to come up with a solid line, melody wise. Usually though, this is how my song structure starts up. A bunch of complex melodies going on at once with no real platform to kind of hold it together. I'll see what I can do about that. I understand but then I kind of don't..
And don't worry about the other advice you gave me, concerning the form and whatnot. I'll take your advice into consideration and, if I'm digging it, or it helps the song considerably, I'll most certainly apply it.
Thanks a lot!
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